Here is the original sentence:
Also, we are unsure about showing the brainstem. It seems to be covering the child’s ear unattractively. If you consider it’s best, we could leave it out, keeping only the cerebrum (frontal, parietal, temporal, and occipital) and the cerebellum.
Corrected version with explanations:
"Also, we are unsure about showing the brainstem because it seems to be covering the child’s ear unattractively. If you consider it best, we could leave it out, keeping only the cerebrum (frontal, parietal, temporal, and occipital lobes) and the cerebellum."
- Reason for change: The first two sentences are connected logically, so changing the period to "because" improves flow.
- "consider it’s best" to "consider it best": The phrase "consider it best" is the correct idiomatic expression; "it’s" (it is) is unnecessary.
- Added "lobes" after the list: It's clearer to say "frontal, parietal, temporal, and occipital lobes" to specify these regions.
This correction improves clarity, flow, and grammatical correctness.