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Corrected sentences

Our heart is a strong muscle about the size of our fist. It pumps blood through twisty tubes called blood vessels. This keeps us alive.

What I changed and why (easy steps)

  1. Changed 'and sends it' to 'pumps blood through' so the sentence is shorter and sounds smoother.
  2. Changed 'We stay alive' to 'This keeps us alive' so it clearly tells what the heart does.
  3. Kept each idea as its own short sentence: short sentences are easier to read and understand.

Simple grammar tips

  • Start a sentence with a capital letter and end with a period.
  • Make sure you have a subject (who or what) and a verb (action). Example: The heart (subject) pumps (verb) blood (what it pumps).
  • Use short sentences to explain one idea at a time.

Nice work! Your original idea was great — just a few small changes made it clearer.


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