Original sentence: The drum of the concrete mixer truck spins to make strong concrete for building.

Corrected sentence: The concrete mixer truck's drum spins to make strong concrete for building.

Why this is better: Saying "the concrete mixer truck's drum" sounds smoother and shows the drum belongs to the truck. The rest of the sentence is good: the drum spins to mix materials so the concrete becomes strong for building.

Even simpler version (for a 7-year-old): The mixer truck spins to mix strong concrete for building.


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