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Original sentence: Pumas hunt at night and can carry prey five times heavier than they are.

Corrected sentence (simple): Pumas hunt at night and can carry prey that is five times heavier than they are.

Better sentence (clearer): Pumas hunt at night and can carry prey that weighs up to five times as much as they do.

Why this is better (for a 7-year-old):

  • We add words like "that is" or "that weighs" to show we are talking about the weight of the prey.
  • "Five times as much as they do" is an easy way to compare weights (how heavy something is).

Fun fact: Pumas are also called mountain lions or cougars.


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