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Here is a simple grammar check and a clearer version you can use.

Original sentences:
A flamingo's feathers turn pink if it eats red shrimp. Without the shrimp, flamingoes are light grey.

Corrected (simple) version:
A flamingo's feathers turn pink when it eats red shrimp. Without shrimp, flamingos are light gray.

Short notes for a 6-year-old:

  • "When" instead of "if" says this really happens whenever the flamingo eats the shrimp. (Using "if" was not wrong, but "when" is a little clearer.)
  • "Flamingos" is the more common plural spelling ("flamingoes" is also okay).
  • "Gray" and "grey" are both correct — "gray" is American spelling, "grey" is British spelling.

So you can pick either spelling for the color, but the sentence above is a clear, simple way to say it.


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