Corrected email:
Subject: Follow-up on our case Hi Anita, Just following up on this thread. We hope you have had a chance to discuss our case with your team. We look forward to hearing from you. Kind regards, [Your Name]
Step-by-step explanation (easy for a 9-year-old):
- Subject: Add a short subject so Anita knows what the message is about before she opens it.
- Hi Anita, - Keep the greeting friendly and put a comma after the name.
- Just following up on this thread. - This is a clearer way to say you are reminding her about the earlier conversation. We removed the smiley because grown-up business emails usually do not use emoji.
- We hope you have had a chance to discuss our case with your team. - This is polite and uses correct grammar.
- We look forward to hearing from you. - Sounds a little more complete than 'Looking forward to hearing from you.'
- Kind regards, and your name - Always end with a polite closing and your name so she knows who wrote it.
Quick tips:
- Keep it short and polite.
- Use a clear subject line.
- Check punctuation: start sentences with a capital letter and end with a period.
- Sign your name so the reader knows who sent the email.
If you want a slightly more formal version, I can write that too.