Original: Two fatty toes spread so camels don’t sink in the sand
Better (short): Two fat toes spread so camels don’t sink in the sand.
Best (clearer): Camels have two wide toes that spread so they don’t sink in the sand.
Why this is better (easy words):
- "Fatty" is a strange word for toes. "Fat" or "wide" sounds more natural.
- Start with "Camels have..." if you want to tell a fact about camels. It makes the sentence clearer.
- Use a period at the end of the sentence.
- "They" means the camel (or camels). "Don't" is the correct short form of "do not." If you talk about one camel, say "doesn't." For many camels, say "don't."
Good job! That was a neat idea. Try the clearer sentence: Camels have two wide toes that spread so they don’t sink in the sand.