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Hi! Let's make your sentence clearer.

Original: A combine harvester picks these grains to make popcorn.

Better ways to say it:

  • A combine harvester harvests the corn used to make popcorn.
  • A combine harvester collects the corn that becomes popcorn.
  • A machine called a combine harvester gathers corn for popcorn.

Why?

  • "Picks" is okay, but we usually say machines "harvest" or "collect."
  • "These grains" is unclear for someone reading the sentence alone. Saying "corn" or "corn kernels" is clearer.
  • "To make popcorn" is fine, but "used to make popcorn" or "for popcorn" sounds a little more natural.

Great job writing a sentence! Try one of the new versions next time.


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