Grammar help for a 6-year-old: correcting “In autumn, many animals, like squirrels, like to make stashes for the winter.”

Original sentence: In autumn, many animals, like squirrels, like to make stashes for the winter.

Better ways to say it (all are correct):

• In autumn, many animals, such as squirrels, make stashes for the winter.
• In the fall, animals like squirrels hide food for the winter.
• In autumn, squirrels hide food for the winter.

Why these are better (simple steps):p>

1. The comma around like squirrels is fine because it adds extra information about the animals.
2. Using the word like twice sounds a bit odd. Try such as or remove the second like to make the sentence smoother.
3. Make stashes is correct but a little grown-up. For a 6-year-old, hide food or save food is clearer and easier to say.

Short and easy to remember: In the fall, squirrels hide food for the winter.