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Original: Fast comets and rockets zip past shiny stars. Black holes gobble things that get too close. Planets circle the Sun, and satellites fly by to take a look.

Corrected: Fast comets and rockets zip past shiny stars. Black holes gobble up anything that gets too close. Planets circle the Sun. Satellites fly by to take a look.

Why these changes?

  • Added "up" after "gobble" so the phrase "gobble up anything" sounds natural and friendly.
  • Changed "things" to "anything" because it sounds clearer.
  • Split the last sentence into two short sentences ("Planets circle the Sun." and "Satellites fly by to take a look.") to make it easier to read.
  • Kept "Sun" capitalized because it is the name of our star.

These corrections keep the writing simple and easy to understand for a 7-year-old.


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