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Original sentence: Mountains are huge folds in the Earth's rocky coat that rose and froze forever.

Better sentences:

  • Mountains are huge folds in the Earth's rocky crust.
  • Mountains are huge folds in the Earth's rocky crust that rose and have stayed that way ever since.

Why these are better (easy steps):

  • "Rocky crust" is a clearer phrase than "rocky coat." Scientists call the outer layer the Earth’s "crust."
  • "Froze" usually means turned into ice. That makes the sentence confusing. If you mean they stopped changing, say "have stayed that way" or "remained."
  • Using "have stayed" shows they rose in the past and are still there now.

Short kid-friendly meaning: Mountains formed when Earth's rock got pushed up, and they have stayed standing for a very long time.


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