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Original: When animals get scared, each has a special trick! Some hide, some run away, and one … makes a stinky smell! Now, who does what?

Corrected (simple): When animals get scared, each has a special trick. Some hide, some run away, and one makes a stinky smell. Now, who does what?

Why this change?

  1. I replaced the exclamation mark after the first sentence with a period so the sentence reads smoothly before the list. Both are okay, but a period makes the two sentences flow better together.
  2. The ellipsis (three dots) was removed because it isn't needed. Plain words work best for young readers: "one makes a stinky smell" is clear.
  3. The verbs match the subjects: "Some hide, some run away" (plural) and "one makes" (singular). That is correct grammar.
  4. The short question at the end, "Now, who does what?", is fine as it is — it invites the reader to guess which animal does each trick.

Other friendly options you might like:

  • When animals are scared, each one has a special trick. Some hide, some run away, and one sprays a stinky smell. Which animal does each trick?
  • When animals get scared, they use special tricks. Some hide, some run away, and one makes a smelly spray. Can you guess who does what?

If you want, I can pick which animals do each trick and make a short quiz for a 7-year-old!


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