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Original sentence

A suntan is the darkening of the skin caused by the sun. It darkens to help protect the skin from getting sunburned.

Corrected version

A suntan is the darkening of the skin caused by the sun. It darkens to help protect the skin from sunburn.

Steps I used to fix it

  1. Remove unnecessary words and repeat ideas for clarity.
  2. Keep the meaning the same: sun causes darkening, which helps protect from sunburn.
  3. Use simple language appropriate for a 7-year-old.

Notes

  • Use sun as both the cause and the protection context (no need for the sun after the first sentence).
  • The concept of protection is correct, but you can simplify to avoid confusion: to help protect the skin from sunburn.

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