Grammar Check
Original sentence: Axolotls breathe with feathery gills that stick out like a crown on their heads.
Fix: Axolotls breathe with feathery gills that stick out like a crown on their heads.
The sentence is mostly correct. Here are a couple of notes to make it clearer for a 7-year-old:
- Subject-verb agreement: The verb breathe matches the plural subject axolotls.
- Descriptive phrase: feathery gills that stick out like a crown on their heads describes the gills well. It’s a nice image for young readers.
- Clarity: If you want to be extra clear, you could say Axolotls breathe through feathery gills that stick out from their heads, like a crown. However, the original is perfectly understandable.
Final version (optional, very slightly reworded for rhythm): Axolotls breathe through feathery gills that stick out from their heads, like a crown.